Her ribcage shook with the strength of the wails that wrenched themselves from her; each sob a jagged ledge from which hot tears flung themselves, howling, down her face. A violent tremor overcame her and she collapsed as if smashed down, there to writhe helplessly in the filthy mud. And yet, for all it’s reek, it was nothing compared to the venom of the words he had launched, screaming into her now shattered heart: ‘I think we need to take a break.’ Her arm convulsed, and as the phone hit the wall and exploded into a million sharp fragments, his text was violently slain.
(continues in Heal)
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this is beautiful robert.. 🙂 one of my most favorite 🙂 I wish some day even I could write this well… 😦
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I’ve been struggling with connecting to my emotions, so it was very difficult for me to write. So I’m very happy that you like this – thank you very, very much! 🙂
Did I tell you I’ve joined a Masters in Creative Writing? I expect to be brought down to earth when that gets going – compared to some people that will have a genuine qualification in this field. Tell me again what you studied?
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ohhh yeah you told.. but seriously, you’re one of the best writers out here. and it was beautifully written. My struggle is still on.
as of my degree, I completed my graduation in economic administration and financial management and shall be persuing my MBA. so preparing for that.. 🙂
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Such a delicious struggle – to become all you should be. You’re so fortunate to be able to pursue this at an early age and then have your whole life to put it to good use.
Or get married and spend your life raising kids and making round chapatis – as per you desires. 😉
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hahah… I’m so sure I won’t be getting married in coming many years…… but hopefully I make something out of myself.. !!
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Yes. If you have the firm intention, I’m sure you will. 😉 Did you never consider writing as a career?
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i don’t think I can ever do that…. I’m not that good a writer even… !!
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Not so! You’re a beautiful writer! That is, you write beautifully. 😊
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thank u so much… you’re really kind 🙂 🙂
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I do try to be, but it doesn’t always come off. Thanks, though. 🙂
You know – it’s not really kindness when it’s the truth. 😉
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🙂 🙂
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Wow. This is really powerful. Well done.
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I hope I’m not interrupting a conversation.
Just wanted to let you know I loved this post and the interview one you posted a little while back. That was an interesting approach.
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Don’t worry, you’re not interrupting anything – I’m glad you decided to stop by, and even happier that you commented. 🙂
Have a great day – Robert.
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I commented on another post of your too, a few days back (paracombodulation). I guess it got lost or something.
Thank you. Good day to you too.
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Ah, I see. I went through a spell where I didn’t have time to get to everything – sorry. New job and all that. Don’t worry, I’ll catch up. 🙂
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Np. Good luck and cograts for the job
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Thanks Mr (or Ms) Confabler, I appreciate that. It’s going good so far. 🙂
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Ms. You can call me jia
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Hi Jia – you can call me Robert if you like. 🙂 I’m in the northern wastes of England in a walled city called York. Where are you from?
Kindness – Robert.
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I haven’t visited yet but my friends tell me it’s a beautiful place.
I’m from the land of round chapatis (though I don’t know how to make one)
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According to what they say, you’re not ready to be married unless you can make a round chapati. 😉 Yes, it’s beautiful here, but India is beautiful and majestic too. It’s morning here, and the sun has not yet emerged from beneath its cloudy sheets. How goes your afternoon, Kia? 😊
Kindness – Robert.
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It’s nice, about to rain.
I’m not the type of girl who sits around perfecting her cooking skills waiting for Prince charming to come.
I worked very hard to build my career and my life. My parents made sure of it.
I guess the marriage thing is just a stereotype.
Good day. – Jia
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Ah, the irony! 😀
And a good day to you too, Jia.
Kindness – Robert.
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The story continues in Heal (there is now a link at the bottom). 🙂
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I’ll read it😊
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Thanks. 🙂
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Very emotional — what a jerk the guy would be to send a text like that! I hate him already…
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Yeah, me too. Shall we kill him in a future story? 🙂
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Well, I was going to say yes, but that may be too good for him. Let’s torture him 😉
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Hmm – I never considered torture. Let me have a think about that. I find that these characters tend to find their own fate and that of their fellow travellers. It’ll be interesting to find out what they decide. I like the idea of redemption, but when you find out (in Awake) more details of what he did, you might not agree.
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Really nice work Robert
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Thanks, Kevin. Just this one, or the series? How are things going with you. It cooling down yet?
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Sorry for being so slow in replying. Summer here is FULL on, always.
I did like the series, very much. I loved how they connected, the fluency of it all. It conjured up great images, especially the slow-mo of the two guys dressing. Fled.
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That series was all about emotion, for me. Good to know you got something out of it. That reminds me – I should finish it off and post it. I just re-read ‘Fled’ – I’m actually surprised by how enjoyable a read it is. (I have zero confidence in my ability to write. Shh – don’t tell anyone!)
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Beautiful expressions… 🙂
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Thank you, Ananya – that’s so sweet of you to say. 🙂
Kindness – Robert (still rescuing you out of the spam).
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Thank you so much!! I am so grateful for your help, kind sir! 😛 😀
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